Below is a short chunk of a Fanfic Im working on. I just want to get some feedback. If you're a fan of the lore.
EDIT: I stayed up all night and worked on some new content for you guys. Let me take a moment though to thanks all of you guys who read my little piece of Destiny lore. I never expected such a positive reaction to my writing. You guys really warmed my heart. Unfortunately the update has too many characters to post here- so I've added a link to a website that has the updated tale in a format that's easier to read. But be sure to review the whole thing again because ive implemented a lot a changes and improvements. Please let me know if anything feels too bloated now. I hope you enjoy what I've added.
Click [url=http://www.wattpad.com/65492718-high-orbit-path-to-a-legand-high-orbit-path-of-a?utm_source=web&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&ref_id=33887937]HERE[/url] to continue the Journey.
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When you say Earth's moon in your location declaration at start, you may be interested to know that the moon's specific name is "Luna." If your fiction takes Titan Gallow across the solar system, you may want a standardized format for these declarations. Earth only has one moon, so you're totally cool here, but orbiting Uranus you would have 27 unique moons to contend with, so the individual name would be extremely important to tell the audience where in the name of the Traveler the story is taking place. For that reason, you may find that calling celestial bodies by their name (and reference planet) will keep everything clear and universal. As an automated sort of fade-in (much like the" Captain's Log, Star date" of Star Trek), a static and clear format will make your work more persistent & believable in the long run.