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3/3/2015 10:36:16 AM
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That's not really a poem, more like a monologue. Free form is technically a form of poetry but this doesn't fit into that category because it has no rhythm or structure.
Nice try though.
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Edited by Kekyoin's Underwater Donut: 3/3/2015 11:16:47 AMOh and you're using too many commas. Not to mention some of them are in weird places. [quote]Only wish is to come across[b],[/b] a stop signal only to...find nothing there[b],[/b] but when the lighting appears[b],[/b] you flinch up looking for someone[b],[/b] yet something does not remain the same[b],[/b] and the only person who you thought[b],[/b] would always be there[b],[/b] seizes[b],[/b] like they were never there[b],[/b] then you stare off to[b],[/b] a distant land of wonder[b],[/b] and thoughts cooling down like the rain, that hits the ground, and you freeze up because your all alone, and the hurt that you felt[b],[/b] you wish that tornado would stay around[b],[/b] deep down[b],[/b] who would wanna be alone?[/quote] This whole thing is just a flurry of commas and weird offbeat pauses. I used to write poetry like this when I was in junior high, although not quite as erratic. Just work on your rhythm and structure and you should be fine. Here's an example of free verse poetry. (See pic above) Free verse can rhyme whether you want it to or not. It still needs to have a structure however, it can't just be a jumbled mess. Take my advice or leave it, I don't mind either way. Hope you have fun writing more in the future!
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Again, structure and rhythm aren't necessary. Although I do agree that they add a different kind of depth to writing that wouldn't be achieved without carefully structuring the poem.
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Free verse poetry has no set rhythm or structure?
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If it doesn't flow. It doesn't show. This is good for a first try though. Rhythm and rhyme are two different things BTW.
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I was only writing from the heart.
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Good, you got one part right. Just keep doing that and eventually you might just get better. :)
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Sure sure. I wrote rhythm for a reason, as it still is setting restrictions on a type of poetry that is meant to have no restrictions. You can say the writing is better classified as prose, but free verse prose poems are still poetry.
