Below is a short chunk of a Fanfic Im working on. I just want to get some feedback. If you're a fan of the lore.
EDIT: I stayed up all night and worked on some new content for you guys. Let me take a moment though to thanks all of you guys who read my little piece of Destiny lore. I never expected such a positive reaction to my writing. You guys really warmed my heart. Unfortunately the update has too many characters to post here- so I've added a link to a website that has the updated tale in a format that's easier to read. But be sure to review the whole thing again because ive implemented a lot a changes and improvements. Please let me know if anything feels too bloated now. I hope you enjoy what I've added.
Click [url=http://www.wattpad.com/65492718-high-orbit-path-to-a-legand-high-orbit-path-of-a?utm_source=web&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&ref_id=33887937]HERE[/url] to continue the Journey.
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Great read.....will u be playing on xb1 or ps4?
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Very well written. I was deeply immersed into the story and was able to picture it happening. Would definitely like to read more!
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Very well articulated. Looking forward to reading more :)
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Awesome! Just checked this again and you've updated it. I'm excited to read more
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Good stuff, I'm looking forward to reading more!
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You're burying your quotes in normal paragraphs which affects the flow for me, but good stuff.
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Not gonna lie. It reads like it was written by a fairly average 15yr old - who's just taken their first creative writing course. Much descriptive, many immersion. Go read something popular in a similar genre, then copy the style of writing there. Not a dig, good luck writing it. But having people who tell you it's "great" isn't going to help you at all. Which is all that's been happening in this thread.
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I like the general style to this short piece. You keep your story loyal to the source material which is much appreciated as well. I'm not a fiction writer so the only advice I can give you is to keep working on your story. Don't ever simply write it and call it done but instead keep editing it until it, not only fits but augments, the image you have in your own mind for your characters and their setting.
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Sorry I haven't read it yet, but the fact that you tried is commendable. If you keep writing, you could be one of the greats some day.
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I like it.