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originally posted in:The Black Garden
10/23/2013 9:40:11 PM
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Great, I like it. That's some good stuff you got going there.
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Edited by SaviorsBlood: 10/23/2013 10:21:23 PMThanks bro. Honestly I am a little nervous about it altogether but I am enjoying it as well. I like the storyline quite a bit. I want it to be as correct as possible but leave some room for creativity and imagination. I just hope I don't run into writer's block any time soon. For the most part I have the major details figured out for the plot. I will try to start Chapter 2 ASAP.
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Love the interpretation of the F.O.T.C., wish I had thought of that.
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Thanks, I have a reason for being so specific with the five factions and the FOTC. That system will be explained further down the road. I only gave enough info in this chapter to hook the readers and force them to ask questions. And I closed it with a bit of a cliffhanger to make them hungry for more. Much more is hidden that will be revealed as the story progresses.
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Do you think all Destiny stories (of those we, as the community, write) take place in the same universe or different universes? Just curious.
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I would like to think that all of the Destiny writers' characters are operating in the same universe. Even though all of our characters differ in so many ways, their humanity is made clear to us. No two people are the same so they can all exist in the same universe. Ultimately our Guardians are fighting for the same cause...for the most part anyway.
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Alright, I like how you put that. I'm just hoping my own story doesn't seem to macho/self centered. I like the idea of everyone characters existing in the same universe having their own story, just not interfering with ones personal story. Anyway, cant wait for chapter two; now i'll go and keep working on Alecs' story, can't stop at eight chapters, writing is to much fun (some days).
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I haven't read your story yet, but if your character is "macho" or "self-centered" then I think that's alright. I think that the conditions that humanity is suffering could give room for interesting character builds that don't fit the typical soldier stereotypes. The human nature that created your character will make your story more relatable and enjoyable. I don't want my story's characters to be seen as plain or two dimensional so I am all for our characters being "human."
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Edited by Hobbes92: 10/24/2013 3:04:32 AMAlec is....human, though part machine, he's still adjusting to his new body. Macho was the wrong word, but I do not try to make him out to be some hero to be acknowledged as being higher than the rest. From a story perspective, all the Guardians are Heroes to a point.
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I like the cyborg spin on your story and it sounds interesting. Your character sounds very unique from what I could guess about most stories. I will have to check it out. I can't wait to see how the infamiliarity of his body affects him.
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Edited by Hobbes92: 10/24/2013 3:10:27 AMI don't have a name for the story yet, but should you want to loot it up, look up #alec, the prologue should be there somewhere. Most of the chapters are hit and miss, but the prologue, chapters 5, 6, and 8 are the best so far, but amateur.
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I'll find them all and read them in order. I think a name will come to you when it is time. Maybe one of your story's chapters in the future will throw a hint at you and the title will fit. And don't sell yourself short. I'm sure there are others out here who have a lot to learn when it comes to writing. As a matter of fact, I'm not a writer. This is really the first time I have taken a serious crack at writing. Maybe once or twice before I had ideas for stories but they didn't work out and I didn't mess with any actual compositions.
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First, thanks for reading my story so far. Second, can't wait for your next chapter. Third, hope none of my story seemed to sappy.
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You are welcome. And I got chapter 2 up this morning. The title is called "Meeting." And no it isn't too sappy. I like the relatable human nature he is experiencing. Keep it up. The story is very intriguing and I can't wait for the next chapter. I really liked chapter 8. Very hooking content my friend.
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You are welcome.
