I'll try and rewrite this, so you can see how someone else would execute your concept. Have faith, I won't change a lot! [quote]It has bean hard to lose most of our troops.It is very hard to find others so we shall put up signs to see if anyone is out there that can help us.A couple days later after putting up signs we herd footsteps behind us.We stopped and I told the Legionaries,we herd a thump and saw one of them fall.Who is there?The reply was a low voice that said We are guardians and we mean no harm State your business,we are here to help not to kill. Why?We are not like the others we believe what you say about not being a threat.Then there were two figures that stepped out from behind the large rock,A Titan,Warlock and a hunter.Please do not shoot we came to help we saw the signs,so here we are said the hunter. Take off your helmets warriors of light.[/quote] [STARTRECORDING|JOURNAL|CLASSIFIED|TIME1934|DAY 17 OF THE EXPDEITION] Seven days ago, we escaped the Fallen Devils' territory. It has been hard to lose most of our troops. If we wish to survive, we'll need to find help from other sources. Perhaps even Guardians, as the other Legions probably won't be able to help us anymore. Not that they'd want to either. They consider us traitors. Fools. They should know that the Legion of Two Horns never stops, until it has completed its bounty. No matter the cost, the mission must be done. There's a reason that the words [i]Loyalty and Duty[/i] are written on our banners. It saddens me deeply that they think that we are like the Broken Legion. We put up signs asking for help. I hope for the best. Enough talking, I will now break down the unit reports. Firstly- One of the Legionaries, who I knew as Au'usk opened the tent flaps and informed me of strange sounds behind our colonne. As soon as I came out of my tent, I recognized the sounds as footsteps, luckily not Fallen. I gestured the other Legionaries to stop, and asked for two Centurions, elite members of my Primian Guard. We walked towards the sound, but were greeted by a low voice. "We are Guardians" "Obviously", I said, as I saw a Titan who stepped out from behind a large rock, along with two others. "State your business" He walked towards me, but I didn't move back. The Legion of Two Horns never moves back. He said: "Why? We're not like the others. We plan to give you a chance, because we actually believe you" A second Guardian, probably a Hunter, took over. "Please do not shoot us, we're here to help. How can we convince you of our good intentions?" I smiled. "Take off your helmets, Warriors of Light" [ENDRECORDING|JOURNAL|CLASIFFIED|TIME1936|DAY 17 OF THE EXPEDITION]

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