[spoiler]This is my first fanfic ever, so bear with me here[/spoiler]
The Exo sat atop his throne in the grand hall of his palace in the ruins of what used to be London in the European Dead Zone. He was leaning against the arm on one side of his massive chair staring into space, thinking about the battles he's been a part of. Epic battles. People say his name with fear. They sing about him, write poems. His kingdom is considered a paradise to any lucky enough to be considered a citizen. He is still a guardian, but he does not go by the rules of the Vanguard. He is merely an ally.
His name, was Hyperion-17
Named after the ancient Titan-God of light, the name fit him well, he wielded light as a weapon and was fearsome with it. Legends say foes cowered, and begged at the King's feet for mercy if they spotted him in battle.
His guards are hardly needed. He enjoys the company though.
The Human approaches Hyperion and examines him.
"Sir? Sir?"
"What is it, Eos?"
"The Eliksni attack our walls once more. We need.."
Hyperion holds his hand up
"They won't be a problem. They haven't broken through yet, they won't today. Or the next. Their house is broken. You don't need to worry."
"Reports from the East tower suggest that they have Walker Tanks."
"They had Walkers last time. You worry too much Eos," he stands up and steps down to Eos, "this is why you complete me. I don't worry, and this is my fault. It might end up being my downfall."
He laughs and leaves the Grand Hall with Eos
"Eos, do you ever wonder why I chose you to be my grand warden, my only honor guard, my advisor?"
"No, I don't. I always assumed you liked me enough."
Hyperion laughs and holds Eos' shoulders
"You're like a daughter to me, you're strong. Much more powerful than any of the people in this glorious kingdom. Granted, most people here live in prosperity. They don't want to fight. These walls keep them safe," he looks at Eos "You keep them safe. You're special. You know that deep down."
Eos looks at Hyperion
"I wonder why people are afraid of you sometimes."
"I wonder the same thing. Alright, next order of business. Eos, head to the Reef and get some supplies from the Awoken. Ammo, information about this new Vex threat, anything of the sort."
"You know the Awoken don't like us. At all."
"They will learn to like us. One day they may need us. The Vanguard has their heads on straight."
Hyperion gives Eos a list of supplies to gather and sends her away. Hyperion walks back into his Grand Hall and takes a seat on his Throne. He leans back and gets comfortable and grabs his hand cannon. It's an elaborate design, slim and smooth, with carvings and etchings on the sides, it's attractively symmetrical. On the handle on the left side, it reads [i]As I Breathe[/i], and on the right side [i]This Kingdom Breathes[/i].
It's his motto. He lives by it. He starts to stare into space again, with his gun in his hand. The barrel is thin, but large enough to fit a bullet that can kill anyone with one quick shot. He hasn't given his gun an official name, but his enemies have spread the name across the system. The Eliksni call it [i]The King's Will[/i]. The name has kind of stuck. He likes it.
"King Hyperion!"
He snaps out of his trance
"What is it?"
"The Eliksni have broken through the wall! We need to arm up!"
Hyperion stands up and grips his hand cannon. He looks at it, and back at the man standing in front of him
"Go back to your home. Protect your family."
"Yes, sir"
Hyperion walks out of the grand hall and watches the Eliksni push through the hole in the wall. The man who warned him runs back to his house, and locks the door. Hyperion sees a squad of his soldiers run into a group of Eliksni footsoldiers and only one comes out, running. Screaming.
"What the hell is going on?!"
A general runs towards Hyperion, out of breath, and barely able to stand
"Hyperion, we need to get the help of the Reef and Vanguard"
"The Reef won't help. Vanguard is our last hope."
"Why are you so damn full of yourself?!"
"I'm not," he laughs "I'm confident. Call Eos back home."
Hyperion fights through the fire and corpses to the wall of his kingdom and climbs up on top of it and lets out a loud cry, all of soldiers repeat it back at him and some of the Eliksni attackers flee. Others stay.
This is weird to Hyperion. Most of them flee, but now, most of them stay.
He's confused. He hears a roar in their language. He hears it
[i]We are not afraid of you, King of Light[/i]
"It's got a ring to it, don't you think?"
A soldier looks at him
"Were you talking to me, sir?"
"Aren't you the only one up here?"
"Oh.. uh, yeah, yeah I am. It does have a good ring, I like it."
"Good. Go back down to the fight soldier"
Hyperion throws him some ammo and coins. The soldier climbs his way down and kills 3 Vandals before meeting everyone on their own lines.
Hyperion looks out onto the horizon and sees some tanks and a Captain, the size of one of the tanks if it stood on its back two legs.
Closer inspection.. it doesn't look like a Captain.. and the Eliksni he was leading had a weird glow in their eyes. It was an eerie green color. When the figure came into view, Hyperion couldn't believe his eyes.
"...Hive?"
He gets off of the wall and orders his men to fall back to the Grand Hall, in the palace
"General, contact Eos on her comms. Have her cancel her mission to the Reef. She needs to get the help of the Vanguard."
"What is that thing out there, Hyperion?"
Hyperion sits down and puts his head in his hands. The Hive have been long extinct, at least in this system. He couldn't believe they were back.
He looks back up and at the general. Even though he's an Exo, fear can be seen in his eyes. Sadness even. Anger.
"Hive."
[spoiler]Like I said this is my first fanfic, so if you have any suggestions on how to improve, leave them down below, and what you think overall. It isn't over yet, there'll be 3 or 4 parts. But please, don't be hateful. Be kind and reasonable and I'll do the same. Thank you.[/spoiler]
[spoiler]https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/217732135/0/0
Part 2 [/spoiler]
[spoiler]Part 3. https://www.bungie.net/en/Forums/Post/218152592?page=0&sort=0&showBanned=0&path=0 [/spoiler]
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2 RepliesThat was pritty good especially for the first one. [spoiler]I would recommend you add the tag off topic, stuff like this gets buried in anything else, trust me I know.[/spoiler] there are two things a would recommend, the main character glides around. Just a added action to indicate that he is moving as well you be nice (don't over emphasis it, i just noticed that one he told them to fall back he was at the top of the wall and then was with them with no indication that he had left the wall) Lastly, eos was referred to as a him in one sentence, I'm assuming she is a she.