originally posted in:The Collective Anomaly
Bonus points to anyone who can identify the inspiration for this one.
[b][i]the eyes[/i][/b]
By the eyes
They all think I'm crazy. They all call me mad, insane, broken. I'm not though. Could a crazy man have been so careful? So stealthy?
I don't know why I killed the man. I think it was the eyes.
The things I've seen in that… That device. Enough to drive a lesser man insane, but they only cleared my vision. I see, I [i]hear[/i] everything. Sounds from above and below, sights from beyond.
Night after night I stalked the old man, he was kind to me, but there was something, something bright about him. He had light, and I had to consume it with dark.
This I knew to be the truth for the eyes spoke it to me.
Night after night I stalked him, so quietly, so [i]carefully[/i] no one could detect it.
For 6 nights I watched the old man, I waited as a cat waits to kill a mouse. I knew when I struck it had to be perfect.
The old man never left his study, he just lay and slept. I needed no sleep for the eyes had showed me how to use his dark to help me.
Each night I would open the door as to fit my head inside, and nothing more. I would lean in slowly Oh [i]so[/i] slowly. I would peer at him but it was never right. This I knew for the eyes told this truth unto me.
On the 7th night I knew it was right. I opened the door more than usual, as to fit in my body and nothing more.
How could a broken man be so careful? This is what I ask of thee.
On that night I entered the room, quieter than a mouse, and I gazed at the man.
I felt his light.
It hurt.
I inched toward the man, closer and closer. I felt his light, I heard his heart.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
But no, my hand had hit the wall, the man sat upright.
He stared into the dark.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
I did not move, I knew he was afraid.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
I stayed there hours, not moving a muscle. Could someone insane be so patient? So cunning?
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
The man lay again.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
The thumping had to stop. I drew my knife and charged. The man shrieked
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
I raised my knife above his chest.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
I brought it down into his heart.
...
The thumping ceased. It was done, the man was dead.
His light faded.
I hid the body under the floor, cleaned the blood, it was perfect.
Could someone broken have been so careful? So acute?
It was when I had finished there was a knock. It came from the door.
I answered the door, took the men on a tour of the house. I told them “look, search everywhere.”
I brought them to the study, I sat them in and gave them food and drinks and chairs to rest. I put my chair right above the body.
No one could ever have known.
Then, I felt it, I saw it and heard it.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
I pretended to not hear it, it was the heart.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
It grew louder and louder.
His light burned me.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
They must hear the heart!
They must feel the light.
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
The light was burning me.
The man must live!
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
They must hear it! They were mocking me!
They knew they knew they knew!
THUMP THUMP
THUMP THUMP
I yelled it out. FINE! I did it I killed him! Look here under the floorboard.
The thumping stopped.
He was dead again. His final act had killed me.
This I knew for the eyes had told me.
[b] [i]I tell this story as a warning. What will you see in there? What will I do to you?[/b] [/i]
English
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Edgar Allan Poe. Tell-Tale Heart! Or something like that!
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Winner! Absolutely love it
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I was reading that story in literature class this past week. I posted after reading the first line.
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I read it this year a while ago. And I mad eat first two lines clues as much as possible. I'm proud of it over all though.
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You made a great read.
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Either Eris morn with her third eye or the guy who created the thorn because he also created the mask of the third man. It has an extra eye
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Well the destiny inspiration isn't either of those but I meant real life, it's inspired by another amazing short story