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Into The Pit: Chapter 1, The Descent

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This is chapter 1 feel free to leave criticism Lucy (hunter), Jonathan (titan), Mike (warlock) , Wayne-234 (hunter), Sara (hunter) and Amelia (titan) stared at the bridge that had just appeared. "I thought there was going to be something I could shoot" Jonathan said, lowering his Invective. Mike replied laughing "Don't be disappointed I promise you can get yourself killed later". Lucy quickly stepped in before an argument started "don't you think we should be focusing in getting down the pit now?" They all began to cross the bridge until they reached the end. At the end there was a hole with pale yellow lights streaking out from it. "Is this it?" Wayne asked. "Well I'm not waiting about" Amelia exclaimed and then she jumped through the hole. "Some day that girl will be the end of us" Sara said, jumping in the hole. The rest of them shrugged and jumped in too. Going down all they could see was blinding yellow lights and the distant echoes of thralls screeching. When they landed at the bottom Amelia was waiting for them. "Have a nice trip?" Amelia grinned, holding her helmet in her hands. "Why have you not got your helmet on?" Sara questioned. "Because it is hot and stuffy down here"Amelia replied. "That's not a good enough reason a thrall could come out of anywhere and claw your eyes out. SO PUT YOUR F*CKING HELMET ON YOU ARE THE REASON WE WILL DIE!"Sara shouted. Amelia obeyed. Lucy, who had been studying a possible route through this dark abyss they were in. "There are lamps that could possibly guide us through" Lucy explained. All 6 of them followed the lamps, jumping at every echo of a screech, with weapons ready.Sara began noticing patterns in the screeches as if coming from behind... Sara turned back to see a massive wave of thralls behind her. "Run" she shouted to the others. "I'll handle these on my own". She swiftly pulled her Duke MK. 98 from its holster and precisely shot 12 rounds into 12 thrall's heads the rest of the thralls fled.... She didn't have to call to find the others she just followed the gunshots. There were lots of thralls charging from all directions. "Now this is a welcoming party!" Jonathan exclaimed. Blue flames suddenly appeared out the darkness. "RUN!" Sara screamed. "CURSED THRALLS!" I hope you enjoy that was chapter 1 The Descent. I couldn't wait to put this up and can't wait to see what you guys think. Chapter 2 The Blades of Darkness is out here is a link: https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/105668604
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