Little Light
Chapter 2
Author's Note(AN)-Thanks for all the support I've seen and I hope you sincerely enjoy this next segment. If you have questions about characters ask down below and I'll try to answer.
-Halo(THM)
The ride was as awkward as awkward could've possibly gotten. I took a ship back to the "Tower" with Melody, whom was an unsurprisingly excessive talker. Estevus spouted out small talk on occasion, hoping to keep Melody from saying something unusual. Which failed. We won't go into details. Kalos didn't even say a word the entire trip. As we arrived in the tower, we were greeted by a small, red cleaning bot. Estevus and Kalos walked off in the direction of the hangar muttering something about, "checking with the Future War Cult." Leaving Melody and I in our current position.
"So where do we go now?" And almost as soon as I asked the question she had my hand and was dragging me towards a large set of stairs in the middle of the area. "Wh-where are we going, Melody!?" I managed to stammer out as she prepared to drag me down the stairs.
"Well, since Kalos and Estevus don't want to show you around, and I'm a Warlock, we are going to see Ikora Rey!" Melody said with a large smile plastered on her face as if she'd gotten a prize.
"Ikea who?" I asked, my curiously besting for one of many times since I had been reborn, as we'll put it. Fira appeared in front of me, stopping Melody from pulling me down a flight of stairs.
"Ikora Rey is the Warlock vanguard. She watches over incoming and veteran Warlocks that come to the tower." Fira said, her robotic tone ringing through. As soon as she was done though, it was straight down the stairs. She pulled me through a long hallway before we reached a large room with a pit in the middle, filled with a long table, and computers stationed throughout the room. Melody pulled me up to the woman closest to us in the pit in the middle, presenting me almost as if I were a trophy.
"Miss Ikora? My Fireteam and I were patrolling on Mars and found a new guardian. See?" She pulled me forward, yanking my arm, and then letting go and taking a step back.
"Hm. Hello, young Warlock. I'm Ikora Rey, the Warlock Vanguard. You are?" She looked at me sternly and held her hand out to me. I grasped it and shook her hand once before letting go and addressing her.
"My name is Frost, ma'am. Nice to meet you."
"Nice to meet you as well." She hands me a piece of armor and nods to Melody. "I assume you will be his mentor, Melody?"
"Really!? Yay!" Melody jumped up and down, excitedly applauding herself.
Ikora the turned back to me. "I want you to stop by the weapons vendor, Banshee-44, then to the Shipwrights. Then, Melody will take you to Old Russia to hunt down some Arc fluctuations."
"Yes, ma'am. I'll have him down to Old Russia within the hour! Come on, Frost!" And once again, she had my hand and we were off.
https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/95958146/0/0 <----- Chapter 1 here!
https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/127696317/0/0 <---- Chapter 3 Here!
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Can you send me a message with chapter 4
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Can you bump so i can read later
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Very good! Looking forward to chapter 3
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Chapter 3 plz
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Edited by Jurgen Blitz: 2/19/2015 2:33:23 PMHi Halo! Thanks for sending me the link. These looks like what could become the first parts of a miniseries and I encourage you to go on. If I may, I would like to point out some tips that you may want to consider: - Paragraphs. Every now and then, hit that Enter key. Having paragraphs lets the reader take his/her own pace through a story, adding spaces that act as "breathing pockets" so that the reader can get some impulse and continue. - Add a bit more description. Your style is good and the first paragraph has very good descriptive elements. But the rest of the story lacks that. Dialogue is great, but introducing short descriptive sections helps the flow of the reading and, again, lets the reader "take a pause" from the conversation to make his/her thoughts about the story. With that being said, you get my thumbs up, and I encourage you to write more!
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I like it, keep going. (Hopefully people are reading my story as much as they are yours..)
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This is awesome! One of the better fan fictions I've read any tips u can pass on to a rookie writer?