Below is a short chunk of a Fanfic Im working on. I just want to get some feedback. If you're a fan of the lore. EDIT: I stayed up all night and worked on some new content for you guys. Let me take a moment though to thanks all of you guys who read my little piece of Destiny lore. I never expected such a positive reaction to my writing. You guys really warmed my heart. Unfortunately the update has too many characters to post here- so I've added a link to a website that has the updated tale in a format that's easier to read. But be sure to review the whole thing again because ive implemented a lot a changes and improvements. Please let me know if anything feels too bloated now. I hope you enjoy what I've added. Click [url=http://www.wattpad.com/65492718-high-orbit-path-to-a-legand-high-orbit-path-of-a?utm_source=web&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&ref_id=33887937]HERE[/url] to continue the Journey. <!DOCTYPE html>
Not gonna lie. It reads like it was written by a fairly average 15yr old - who's just taken their first creative writing course. Much descriptive, many immersion. Go read something popular in a similar genre, then copy the style of writing there. Not a dig, good luck writing it. But having people who tell you it's "great" isn't going to help you at all. Which is all that's been happening in this thread.