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Edited by RingLeader77: 6/2/2020 7:28:57 AM
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[quote]He glanced at her in surprise. “Of course! You’re my sister. Besides, even if we did end up apart, you obviously wouldn’t let that last for very long.” He gave a boyish grin.[/quote] He's right, she won't. That was really good! I think you wrote this talk between siblings (even if adopted) very well. It reminds me of real life even, so you're doing a good job at realistic character interactions!
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  • Edited by Gingiebread: 6/2/2020 3:49:03 PM
    *sigh of relief* That is really good to hear. Thank you for your reply!! Edit: I’m getting good reviews on the flashbacks, but how was the second half of the story?

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  • The second part was great as well. The part that stood out to me there was the description of the area. It was also nice to hear Skye's doubts as she makes connections between her past and her life in Off-topic now.

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  • I love describing landscape, hehe. Thank you again! Feedback is very much appreciated!

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