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Halo 3 Epilogue Story (Part Twenty Now In) see page 35

[b] Prologue [/b] Mist and distant stars swirled and danced in a dazzling display of colour. In the distance he could make out the faces of those he had lost, many of them friends but all were heroes determined to ensure the survival of mankind. But unlike them he had prevailed where they had not and against all the odds he had defeated countless enemies on countless worlds. He had survived and was now the last of his kind in a universe full of uncertainty. As he continued to drift in his new found peace the distant mist changed colour once more to a fiery red, which radiated with blinding beauty in the dark and empty void. His name was whispered amongst the stars over and over again, but then the whispering became louder until a deafening roar filled his already ringing ears. “John, wake up!” screamed Cortana. John quickly opened his eyes only to see the shattered and broken section of the frigate before him. He opened the stasis chamber and pulled his weightless body from its inviting warmth. All around him the hull of the ship seemed to warp and shudder as a series of bright red flares cascaded around the bulkheads. “Status,” Barked john “Re-entry Chief, we’re about to make an emergency crash landing.” Explained Cortana “Where?” asked John “I don’t know, but wherever we are it’s nowhere near Earth.” Replied Cortana John moved to the far end of the deck to see what Cortana was talking about. Below the broken UNSC ship was a large planet shrouded in darkness, the only visible light was on the horizon from the now rising sun. “Firing emergency thrusters!” stated Cortana Despite only having half the ship to use, the robust structure and redundant back-up systems were still capable of manoeuvring the hulk in the planets atmosphere. The ungainly shape of the UNSC frigate would provide maximum surface for slowing their descent. The only thing they had to worry about was the landing itself. [b] Part One [/b] “What are our options?” asked John “I could crash-land the Forward Unto Dawn, but I doubt that even you would survive chief. Our only other option is for you to get to one of the ships’ hangar bays and try and fly a Pelican to the surface. Once there, I’ll land the Dawn as best as I can.” Explained Cortana “I’m not leaving you behind, not again.” Stated John “Chief you don’t have a choice; if you stay you’ll die. Falling from the sky is one thing, but falling from the sky in 600,000 metric tones of frigate is another. Flying a Pelican to the surface is your only option.” Said Cortana John stared at Cortana as he weighed the possible options. No doubt every conceivable plan that he was going through in his head had already been examined, summarized and discounted by Cortana along with another ten thousand options within the blink of an eye. Her calculating abilities were only matched by his stubbornness, something which Sgt Johnson had remarked on more than one occasion. But deep down he knew that she was right and reluctantly agreed. “Where’s the nearest hangar bay?” he asked. “Two decks down, the damaged lift shaft is your best way of getting there. Once there I’ll try and steady the ship enough for you to fly out, but once your out it’ll be one hell of a ride.” Replied Cortana “I can handle it.” Stated John with a confident tone John grabbed the assault rifle and attached it to his armoured back before boosting himself off the stasis chamber and towards the darker section of the ship. Cortana had activated several way-points on his NAV computer all of which illuminated a small section of his display like a trail of proverbial breadcrumbs. Ahead of him the hull shuddered under the increasing stress of re-entry. Although they were still some way out before the ship would start to burn, John knew that the most time he had was around seventeen minutes. Then as if by some form of telepathy, Cortana activated a small timer display in the upper left section of his helmet which read: 17:28 before it began to count down. “This is how much time you have chief before the Dawn becomes too unstable for you to leave, so I suggest that you hurry.” Shouted Cortana John glided towards the lift shaft ahead of him and then placed an armour encased hand on the twisted door. John planted his feet on the floor before exerting some pressure on the broken doorway. After several seconds of pulling, the metal gave way and the door glided slowly away from him revealing a dark lift shaft that almost seemed to descend into infinity. After increasing the power to his helmet mounted lamp and boosting the gain on his night vision sensors, John quickly dived into the bowels of the Dawn. All around him shapes and shadows fleeted and warped in the changing light, giving the illusion that he was traveling with company. John only wished that were true. He would have given anything to be with his old team again. Cortana snapped John back to reality with a progress report on their re-entry; he was surprised to discover that almost five minutes had passed since he left the upper deck. John once again focused on his lonely descent just as the hangar lift doors came into view. Unlike the ones that he had left behind these doors were untouched, which presented more than just one problem. As there was no damage to the doors it left John with very little to hold onto. “Cortana can you spare any power for the doors at the hangar level?” asked John “Not at the moment chief, I’m using all I have just to keep us pointing the right way. You’ll just have to use your head.” Replied Cortana “Good idea.” Whispered John John pushed gently away from the hangar entrance and towards the opposing wall of the lift shaft where the magnetic guide rails for the lift carriage were located. After slowing and positioning himself properly John pushed as hard as he could towards the lift doors and smacked into them with the force of a small tank. The impact sent stars swirling around his head and momentarily lowered his shield strength to 76% before recharging. Cortana immediately noticed the change in his status and asked what was happening, John replied with his usual sense of wit. “Just following your advice,” The encounter with the lift door had left it bent and buckled with enough surface gain for John to twist the metal into a more appropriate doorway. After passing through the gap John found himself in a large room that barely resembled any sort of hangar. All him around were various and untidy piles of logistical containers that had either been left unsecured or had been shaken from their mountings. Ahead of him were six Pelicans; four were clearly damaged to the extent that flight was not an option and two of those had been ripped from their ceiling mounted transit clamps. The other two seemed intact and were still fixed to the large mechanical clamps on the hangar ceiling, but as John glided closer he noticed that one of them was covered in a series of large, deep gouges that meant re-entry would be more than a little warm. The last remaining Pelican, apart from a couple of dents, was still perfectly flight worthy, and the automated release system for that particular clamp was still working. It seemed that John’s unusual run of good luck was still with him. John swam in the zero gravity towards the working Pelican and hauled himself inside through its rear deployment ramp. Despite the outward appearance of the drop ship its interior was anything but calm as John made his way to the cockpit across an internal sea of scattered weapons and ammunition cases. The cockpit was a welcome sight and despite his bulk john managed to secure himself in the small pilot’s chair and activated the controls. Lights and display screens flickered into life giving the cockpit a strange glow that was more reminiscent of a Covenant cruiser. It had been a while since he had flown himself, but he had a huge area to land on; the planet below. So getting down would not be a problem. John glanced at the timer display in his SPARTAN helmet where it read 4:09; the trip had taken longer than expected. In a series of quick stabs at the control panel the engines erupted into life and John released the Pelican from its transit clamp and turned the ship around before stabilizing the drop ship in a small hover. “Cortana, status!” bellowed John “The Dawn’s a little sluggish but I think I’ve managed to stabilize her trajectory. I see that you finally got yourself a means of transport,” Answered Cortana “Opening outer doors.” As Cortana opened the hangar doors John was greeted with a blaze of light from the rising sun on the planets’ horizon. His faceplate polarized to compensate for the intense glare, allowing John to see the interior of the frigate around him once more. “Chief you’ve got less than three minutes, get out!” commanded Cortana John answered with a light push on the engines thrusters, which sent the Pelican towards the illuminated opening. The Dawn shuddered several times in the increasing turbulence before Cortana regained control long enough for John to activate the afterburners on the drop ship, sending it hurtling outwards and into the violent atmosphere. The Pelican jerked suddenly as it came into contact with the rushing air, sending Johns head down with the g-force. After a couple of seconds John regained his control on the nauseating dive and turned to follow the descending frigate just as the Dawn’s forward hull began to glow red from the re-entry manoeuvre. John fired the afterburners a second time and sped towards the falling frigate. “Cortana what’s your status?” shouted John “I still have control of the descent and expect impact in twenty two minutes, after I have made a series of-.” Cortana’s conversation was cut short as the antenna array was ripped from the Dawn in the glaring inferno. John followed closely behind in the Pelican trying to raise an answer from his artificial comrade. [Edited on 01.27.2009 12:56 PM PST]
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  • That was a great piece of writing. To get this straight this has nothing to do with the epilogue story right? I loved the detail you put into the Captains overall "feel"

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  • [b] Here's what I actually used for my English work: [/b] Tarrick wandered slowly around the command deck of the [i] Hellgret [/i], its polished Tritium hull reflected the countless years of experience that his features portrayed. Despite this, Tarrick was an efficient and respected ship commander, and the [i] Hellgret [/i] would no doubt add to his already impressive stature. Around him technicians and operations staff busied themselves with endless combat simulations and weapon diagnostics, which would assure the fleet of victory. He knew that engaging the enemy with overwhelming force, superior tactics and firepower had been the downfall of many commanders who underestimated their foe. But Tarrick was determined that he would not be one of them. Tarrick’s enemy was indeed primitive and narrow minded. With a predilection for self- annihilation and murder on a grand scale, they were more than capable of presenting a threat to any unsuspecting and overconfident invader. Their millennia of warfare had created societies that had raised vast armies who constantly fought with one another over scraps of seemingly worthless land and bleak featureless deserts. But despite their apparent barbarity, Tarrick was fascinated by them. His decades of schooling as a child had shown him that they had a unique grasp of tactics. And even when faced with overwhelming odds, defeat could still be avoided. One battle in particular that had stayed with him over the years concerned a small group of soldiers armed with just swords, spears and shields. Over the course of a few days they inflicted an unbelievable amount of casualties on an enemy many times their size with little loss of their own. In the end though they were betrayed, surrounded and killed. And it was these historic accounts that captivated him. Tarrick had encountered many enemies before that were gifted with technology far beyond those in his studies, but their ineptitude in battle and failure to seize any form of initiative had resulted in defeat. Whereas this new enemy were intelligent in more ways than one. As his crew readied themselves for the coming battle Tarrick gazed at the main display screen at the forward end of the command deck. Its flowing star scene was almost seductive, as millions of observable suns twisted and warped as the nearby space was altered by the ships powerful star-drive. This technology had been available to his species for over fifty millennia. But Tarrick’s enemy had only recently ventured to the several planets that made up their star-system, and even that was made by autonomous probes launched years before their arrival. Even this attempt at progress had puzzled him; some were intent on discovery whilst others were more concerned with destruction and death. The display on the forward screen suddenly changed and Tarrick could feel a shift in the artificially created gravity field from the deck plating. They were slowing. Before him the image viewer polarized and adapted with the shifting spectrum to exhibit the more familiar scene of stationary starlight. Tarrick immediately ordered a fleet-wide status report, and at the same time the viewer changed to the lateral sensor array where the previous starlight was replaced by thousands of capital ships, cruisers and fast attack craft all in perfect formation. At the leading edge of the fleet were point-defence craft. They were tasked with destroying any and all orbital installations around the target, and already they were accelerating ahead of the main fleet to carryout their duty. The bulk of the fleet was made up from capital ships like the Ascendant Justice. Between them they could house whole populations of cities, but they were also more than capable of reducing one to rubble in an incredibly short space of time. They would provide the majority of the fleet’s firepower in addition to the drop-ships for the ground assault. Flanking them were the faster and more maneuverable cruisers. Despite their reduced firepower when compared to a capital ship they could attack swiftly and in large numbers. This made them the perfect accompaniment to any assault. After a brief wait a multitude of confirmation indicators chimed the main fleet’s readiness for combat. Only two support craft had been forced to remain at the exit point which sent a crooked smile across Tarrick’s wrinkled face. Despite the advanced technology available to them, travelling between distant points in space was always risky, and he had accounted for the possible loss of ten or more ships at least during transit. So the news of two intact but non-operational craft was more than welcome. Once Tarrick was confident with the fleet’s dispersal and status he ordered the advance to the target. Before them a dull-grey moon flashed quickly by as they sped into a geosynchronous orbit with the target. As they arrived the point-defence fleet was mopping up the remaining satellites in orbit, but Tarrick knew that only a handful of them were even the slightest of threats. “Stand by to fire,” ordered Tarrick. The bridge crew and the rest of the fleet immediately responded with the opening of plasma batteries. The dull thrum of charging weapons sounded throughout the hull of the [i] Helgret [/i], as the energy of several suns were channelled into cohesive balls of superheated plasma. “Fire!” Bellowed Tarrick The ship shuddered violently before the inertia reduction field kicked in. The display screen changed once more to the forward view just in time for it to be illuminated by hundreds of pulsing plasma shells all hurtling towards their individual targets on the planet below. Tarrick was pleased by what he saw and had to restrain himself from roaring with joy. He was old enough to know that victory was far from assured. But in the end, like every other world before it, Earth would fall and every trace of Humanity would die with it. [Edited on 02.05.2009 10:54 AM PST]

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  • Just remember Wolverfrog, when I first started writing, my stories were rubbish and the punctuation was dreadful. But then I had another go at English at the age of 33 and quickly discovered that everything that I had learned at school was a load of rubbish. My punctuation and writing quickly improved, which lead to several short stories that were a lot easier to read. My final course work even had short science fiction story in it. My tutor even said that my writing was lively and colourful, but lacked the correct punctuation. So I corrected this. You won't get it right everytime, but if you practice often enough, and put your heart and soul into a story, then you'll eventually turn out some truely great stuff. So keep at it. [Edited on 02.05.2009 10:55 AM PST]

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  • I think you have the potential to go far, you should start writing down some plot ideas for your own story. You don't need experience to be an author, why, J.K Rowling was just an ordinary person working on an idea, and these days, she is hailed as one of the greatest fiction writers around. I say go for it. My writing is ok, but I doubt it will ever go beyond this forum. But you can go far.

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  • Cheers Wolverfrog. I've tried twice before, but it came to nothing. Thanks Nuns, but all I really want them to do is turn around and say either "We like it Max, it really is in keeping with the whole Halo universe, but it won't become the next game." or "No it's pants and please stop writing." I'd just like to know one way or the other. I just want to hear their opinion. I'm not asking to be hired as a writer (although that would be a dream come true), I just want to hear what they have to say about it, and what they think of the whole fanfic thing. I would be surprised if they hired me to be honest. I have no writing portfolio to speak of (apart from some casual writing and this story), and I'm sure they would be a little sceptical or concerned if they hired an unproven writer. Even though I am writing a novel at the moment, which is coming along nicely, they might consider such a thing a little risky. The way that I write my Halo parts are quite different to how I write in a more proffessional manner. In the Epilogue story I tend to shorten things, or dilute them a little. This being due to the limit of characters that the thread will allow for each post. I were to go into far more detail and emphasise the emotional side of things even more, then each part would be more like an entire chapter, taking up a whole page with a wall of text that may be too much for some readers. These parts are meant to be a more relaxed and casual read for those who like diving into the Halo universe from time to time. But more than that, I just like to write.

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  • I submitted this thread as news yesterday, but to no avail. Sorry.

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  • [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] MaxRealflugel Cheers Hal0man C'mon Bungie, do the decent thing and read my story.[/quote] i love your story and i dont mean to bring you down but i dont think bungie would have an interest in this. i think if they have any plan to carry on the story after halo 3, they already have a set idea of what they want to happen to the chief and cortana and the other spartans. dont let that discourage you from writing. its clear that a lot of people on hear enjoy this story, and hey, maybe im wrong, maybe bungie is looking for a writer. and in that case i think you'd be in luck. maybe not for the continuation of the halo trilogy but who knows.

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  • Cheers Hal0man C'mon Bungie, do the decent thing and read my story.

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  • WOW! I just got back into reading this and I caught up from an earlier chapter. My eyes are burning from the amout of Pure Win That I have just read. The new GAUS weapons are a awsome! It makes we want to use them In Halo now! And I am so Happy that the All the Spartans are back together, one big happy armored family. And, after all this, I hope Cortana is saved somehow. Keep up this story Max, I cant wait till part 21!!!!!!!!!! [Edited on 02.04.2009 5:33 PM PST]

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  • The Enemy.

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  • [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] ajw34307 Well let's see if the Cheif and the other Spartans have it in themselves to grad 'em and smite 'em![/quote] wat

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  • Well let's see if the Cheif and the other Spartans have it in themselves to grade 'em and smite 'em! [Edited on 02.04.2009 1:54 PM PST]

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  • i had a feeling it was something along those lines. sorry i doubted you there.

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  • They do have a proper name, but that will be revealed later on. Cortana misunderstood the data that she had access to. Lost in translation you could say.

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  • one of the problems i have tho is that "The Enemy" is kind of a corny name for...the enemy. in the part where they encounter the Chief, they seem really awesome, and it doesn't sound like their name fits them. it doesnt sound like you put much thought into it. it doesnt fit among titles like Forerunner and Precursor. just a thought

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  • Everyone, and I mean everyone, submit news about this to Bungie as soon as you read this message. In other words, do it, and do it now!

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  • Cheers Nuns. Much appreciated.

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  • this is an incredible piece of writing. i never read fan fiction but for some reason i cant stop reading this. ive read all the novels and thats what i feel like im doing when i read your stuff. the part where lord hood saw MC and cortana on the screen actually gave me chills. i dont know how you accomplished that bc im pretty sure thats never happened to me when reading any of the books. excellent job. im looking forward to reading whatever else you have in store for us.

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  • [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] MaxRealflugel I'm dying to get some sort of response from someone that works for Bungie. What do Bungie think of this story? Do they like it? Is it a load of rubbish? Is it way off track? does it adhere to Halo canon? It would just be nice to know what the Bungie family thinks of this fanfic, and what they think of other fanfics. Please...someone...anyone from Bungie. Answer my call.[/quote] someone must have saw it because it got pinned in the gallery forum. but as far as feedback from bungie goes, I hope you get some eventually

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  • Part Twenty was great, keep up the great work.

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  • [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] MaxRealflugel I'm back.[/quote] Awesome!

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  • I'm back.

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  • [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Dexomega [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Dr indiana I think Bungie needs to consider hiring Max to write the story-line for the next Master Chief game. All of this is well fleshed out, it could pass as a Bungie game easily in my opinion. [/quote] Not so much a game... but it is a great read.[/quote] Definitely thorough enough to make into a book though

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  • [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Dr indiana I think Bungie needs to consider hiring Max to write the story-line for the next Master Chief game. All of this is well fleshed out, it could pass as a Bungie game easily in my opinion. [/quote] Not so much a game... but it is a great read.

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  • I think Bungie needs to consider hiring Max to write the story-line for the next Master Chief game. All of this is well fleshed out, it could pass as a Bungie game easily in my opinion.

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  • this is so epic, i need to eat popcorn with it... *munch munch*

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