Taking a concept that's growing in popularity and mixing it up with Destiny? Pretty cool... It's a decent intro, a little short, but enough to grab people's attention.
You said you wrote this in 20 minutes? If you continue this, I hope you take more time writing, making the chapters longer and with more detail. I'll look forward to it.
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I tried to keep the prologue short; definitely bigger chapters with more detail, heads up!