Chapter 1: Silence
Venus, Ishtar Academy
"Stay down, and whatever you do, don't lwt them find you" the girl said as she walked into nothingness.
The Exo Stranger landed on a hard surface. The floor burned her hands, and she could feel the heat rising in her mechanical body. She took her gun up and looked around. Silence. She put her hand next to her head.
"Marcus! Where are you? Did they find you?"
Silence
"Marcus! Are you there! Marcus!"
Once again, she walked into nothingness. She landed on the same hot land. She looked up and saw the building. A full on metal structure with no special features to it. Bam. A single gunshot was heard. She heard a buzzing noise in her ear.
"Marcus, is that you?"
A tiny voice emanated in her mind.
"Is anyone there? Hello? Ah!!" (The sound of metal slamming metal is heard and a gun is fired, though it is impossible to tell who shot what).
"Hello!"
Silence once more.
The stranger rushed into the building. She dropped her gun in shock.
[spoiler]I'll write more if this gets enough likes/comments. It's my first time ever writing something so sorry if it's not really that good[/spoiler]
Chapter 2: https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/105902397/0/0
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God Dammit! I came for robot boobs and now I have disappointment.
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Then Marcus popped out and screwed her
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I bet half of the people who came in here thought it would be erotica.
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This isn't the type of fanfic I was expecting.
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Marcus is on Pandora!
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No marcus is off fighting in gears of war. So no he is not there.
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Looks good, but one thing, if its a story from The Strangers perspective, surely she would not be referred to as The Stranger. Would a stranger call themselves a stranger?
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I really really hoped this was erotic at first (Don't judge, robot sex can be hot), but I enjoyed the read and will look forward to more. I think that as long as you edit your writing and are open to valid criticism you're not a bad writer, it's your creative license, use it how you want! Keep on keepin on brother.
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Edited by ThatAmazingIdea: 3/3/2015 2:25:30 AMn33d$ moar t1ts plz Nice job for a first attempt at writing!
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A very nice start to what i hope is a great series by you. Keep up the good work and I'd definitely say go for the sequel, regardless of popularity of this thread. But mostly just have fun doing it.
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Make a hentai
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Good job, I like the concept
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Someone reply please do I scan come back later
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Chaper 2, Samantha, is up! Please check it out! https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/105902397/0/0
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Not at all bad for a first attempt
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It seems fine to me, keep at it bro
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