Okay, real quick critique: You're fine with the descriptions and imagining a setting and the little bits and details to flesh out the world, stuff like the metal table / high-tech stovetop; I'd keep thinking up more stuff on the side and save those fun bits for fleshing out more later. All the combination of mythic sci-fi / idealized reality. Think how this stuff might work from the perspective of someone living in the time that would take it for granted that it just does, but with a loose understanding of how it does. Think about this, though; I feel like the whole introduction to Destiny's universe and basic plot/background is just being revealed in one long and almost pedantic near-monologue this warlock "mansplaining" everything to the titan with very little back and forth or any mystery. The rest is all description and no exposition. There are some opportunities to reveal what the world's about without having to rely so heavy handed on dialogue; you don't even mention the Traveler in the sky above this market the Titan walks through or what he thinks about it given what he does and doesn't know about being sent out into the abyss, whether to explore or invade. So, I'd think about getting us inside the Titan's head and the setting first a bit more before introducing us to this know-it-all, and try to give him more of a unique perspective than simply a would-be narrator. But keep giving readers more of the fantasy mixed with sci fi; what if the armor and gauntlets and other pieces of gear they wear have modern-inspired names and functioning as well? What do the kettles look like? Are there composite metals and materials other than silver that would last longer to wear and tear and be more functional?