First, I just want to say I thought that your story is quite good overall, but there are a couple of thigs I have questions about. First off, in the Prolouge, you said something about a holocron, and I was wondering if you were going to change that to something like holo projector or something like that, because holocrons are from Star Wars (Jedi and Sith artifacts). Also, is Einstein a 'working' name for the A.I. on Dr. Halsey's ship? Because, honestly, I don't care for that name (It just sounds kinda cheesy is all). Also, while this is kind of stereotypical, to me it just dosn't seem like Elites would ever really use humor (from the prolouge again). Finally, I would just like to reiterate that I think you are doing a very good job, and keep up the good work.