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originally posted in: Feedback on Analyzation Paper
11/13/2015 4:35:27 PM
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I didn't read into depth, but you seem to repeat words and phrases. The prime example would be "this speech". Try to limit that phrase to about 2 times a paragraph. Not a bad start though!
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