I was expecting at least 900 words out of this, but nicely done none the less. There are still some inconsistencies in your punctuation within your quotation marks. I point this out every chapter, I think, so, I'm just going to quote it once and move on. [quote]"Dredgen shouldn't have gone in alone" Kabr glanced behind them, checking that they weren't followed.[/quote] [i]"Dredgen shouldn't have gone in alone." Kabr glanced behind them..[/i] Now, had you written it as: [i]"Dredgen shouldn't have gone in alone," Kabr said as he glanced behind them...[/i] Then you would use a comma instead of a period. It's weird because in some sentences you'll write it correctly, then, in others you totally miss them. But hey, I -blam!- up all the time too, so don't sweat it. Keep it going, man. This is good stuff. P.S. It's ok if your action sequences are a little longer and a little more descriptive. I mean, Nova bomb after Nova bomb is going to cause some detrimental damage, and I wouldn't be opposed to seeing you describe it a bit more.