[u][b]Episode 1: Scout's Honour[/b][/u]
Toland and Dredgen sneaked through King's Watch in the Cosmodrome, searching for the hidden entrance to Moluk's laboratory.
This was their third attempt at locating it, and Dredgen was starting to become impatient.
"What a waste of time." Dredgen rolled his eyes as he casually snapped the neck of a fallen sentry. "Why are we looking for a Hive breeding ground in Fallen territory?"
"Shut up!" Toland snapped. He was getting tired of Dredgen constantly disregarding orders. "We wouldn't still be searching if you could stop shooting as soon as you see a single hive!"
Their radios crackled as Kabr, the third member of their so-called fireteam, reported in.
"Will you two ever shut up?" he was covering them from the outside with a sniper rifle. "I can hear you two arguing from out here"
"Anything to report?" Toland replied, scanning the room for threats.
"Negative, no hive activity in this area, a few fallen patrols, but otherwise? Nothing"
Toland sighed, "Perfect, we'll try again tomorrow, copy?" Dredgen smirked half-heartedly.
"Affirma-, wait! Heat signatures all around you, watch out!" Toland whirled around as Kabr sniped a stealth vandal who had been in a perfect position to kill him.
"Heads up! Vandals coming down the corridor!" Dredgen shouted, his Thorn flashing as vandals fell dead to the ground.
Toland swore and fired Bad Juju, catching them off gaurd. In a matter of seconds. Toland and Dredgen had cleared out the vandals, but more were coming, and there was no way out.
"I'm starting to regret ever joining this team" Dredgen muttered, unsheathing his sword.
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The doors flew open and a ring of Fallen encircled Toland and Dredgen. They bore the colours of the House of Kings.
"I'll take the ones on the left, you take the ones on the right?" Dredgen's eyes scanned the room.
Toland was about to reply, but another Fallen, a baron from it's cape. "No" he shook his head.
"We do not seek quarrel with your house!"Toland shouted in the Fallen tongue. The baron faltered.
"Why should I believe that human, when you are trespassing in our house?"the baron signaled his troops, who raised their weapons.
"The seek the Wormwaker,"Toland explained hastily. "She has been plaguing your house as much as ours"Dredgen looked on, utterly confused.
"What are you doing Toland?" Dredgen seethed, never taking his eyes off of their captors.
"Saving our asses, and finding our target" Toland hissed back. He spoke into his communicator. "Kabr, stand down, this could get ugly"
The glint of the sniper rifle disappeared. the baron visibly relaxed. He barked something to Toland, which the warlock almost didn't catch. He bowed to the baron, who left the room, taking his forces with him.
Dredgen turned to Toland. "So many questions, first, why did they leave?" Toland shrugged. "He told us where Moluk is, she's hiding in a Hive Seeder, not to far from here"
Dredgen shook his head, "that's not what I asked..."
Toland sighed, "let's just say i've collected plenty of favors over my vast time as a guardian. Come on, we need to move if we're going to stop her."
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To be continued...
Next Chapter: http://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/119065916/0/0
Table of Contents: https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/114713352/0/0
Edit 1: hey guys, I've decided to revive Fireteam X because of all the ideas I have for it, this part (book 2) will be 5 chapters long, maybe posting them once a week, please enjoy!
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The Lost Arts: Chapter 3: Coordinates & Chronovores: https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/156538416/0/0
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If you publish a book I will gladly buy it! I'm really enjoying the read. It would be awesome if Bungie incorporated this into the lore.
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Bump. Im loving fireteam X.
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Solid story, read all of book 1. Good job!
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DREGEN lol great series so far should try to make a real book bump
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Edited by Oversoul: 4/26/2015 11:48:56 PMI'm glad to see this making it's return. Really enjoyed Book 1, I'm sure this will be even better. Bump
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Yup, remember this happening
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One more thing... Try not to self-bump so much, it makes you look desperate and that you are begging for views. Post it and let it stand on its own, and if you must give it a bump, only do it once or twice. Trust me, we all feel we should be getting more recognition than we are and we all feel that we should be getting more comments and likes, but sometimes, that's just the way it goes.
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[quote]"What a waste of time" Dredgen rolled his eyes...[/quote] You're missing punctuation here and a few other spots of your dialogue. This could be corrected several ways, but the easiest is probably something along the lines of: [i]"What a waste of time," Dredgen said as he rolled his eyes. His vice-like hands snapping the neck of the Fallen sentry like a twig.[/i] And always keep your punctuation marks on the [i]inside[/i] of your quotation marks. [quote] ...but another Fallen, a baron, from it's cape. "No" he shook his head.[/quote] Also, you don't need the appositive comma enclosing, [i]baron[/i]. Baron is considered essential information because, since there is more than one type of Fallen, you are describing what type of Fallen it is, therefore, no comma after baron. [i]...but another Fallen, a Baron from its cape. "No," he said, shaking his head.[/i] [i]It's[/i], is another way of saying [i]It is[/i] or [i]It has[/i]. The possesive form of [i]it[/i], is [i]its[/i]. Therefore, when you describe the baron's cape, you want to use [i]its[/i] because it is describing the cape that belongs to him. Other than that, your story looks solid. Keep it up, any help or anything, just let me know and I'll do what I can!
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Another exciting chapter.
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