Not many of you realized that [i]this is just a sample.[/i] All character development happened in previous pages. Yes this was heavily influenced by video games. There's no blood yet because its just a training exercise. I know I can't please everyone, that's clearly demonstrated by all the feedback I got. But, this was my first story that I've ever been committed to finish, and the only one I'm satisfied with so far. All my previous stories didn't sit well with me, because they became disjointed and didn't make any sense. Thanks for all the feedback, but also note that this is only my first version, and it'll probably be revised countless times by the ime I've finished it. [Edited on 05.27.2010 3:15 AM PDT]