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originally posted in:The New Dojo
3/24/2017 12:07:32 AM
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"Good, this place is full of demons and monsters. Ready to go?"
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"Rearin..." [b]He lowered the knife, instead jutting a handgun into Anton's back[/b]
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"Dammit fine! Grab my arm and I'll take you back!"
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[b]With Royal's free hnad, he wrapped his fingers around Anton's forearm[/b]
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[b]Anton murmured, and proceeded to teleport Royal back to where everything started.[/b]
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"Gee wilkers thanks alot..."
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"Just, please, let me go."
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[b]Royal took a step back, keeping his gunned aimed upwards.[/b] "K..."
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[b]Anton turned to face Royal, tossing a strange device to him[/b] "I guess we are done here. Goodbye, Royal."
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[b]He caught it, and simply nodded at the man[/b]
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"Best of luck." [spoiler]Anton vanished, leaving only Royal looking at the empty space left behind.[/spoiler]
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[spoiler]End im assuming?[/spoiler]
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[spoiler]End. Finally! Hold on to the crystal and device, as they will both be useful in future plots.[/spoiler]
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[spoiler]I'll give you some pointers -Certain parts felt like i had hit a brick wall You want to have the story, and the lore, at the ready before the plot even begins. -Give the bosses "quirks" or weaknesses. As it stands, these guys are extremely overpowered. It will be more fun fighting them if there's a certain weakness that the bosses have. For example, water is excellent against fire. -Don't follow this particular story YET Work on a smaller plot as practice. Or just take a few more days, think it through [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Ok cool. This was my first main plot, mainly one to build up the lore of possible future plots, and introduce characters. I gave it a try, and it turned out okay for a first test. [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Oh yeah! I totally agree! It was very solid [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]I personally like the concepts, I think I just need to work on balancing and the general "flow" of the story.[/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Ya! I wouldn't dwell too much though. Takes time to figure it all out [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Yeah. I get what your saying. [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]I look forward to the next part! Hit me up when it's put! [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Alrighty. Will do. Plan to write some stuff before continue with this plot. Going to make a new character from a Dishonored-based universe since that seems to be the closest to the current theming of my plots.[/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Nice! Until then i suppose [/spoiler]
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[spoiler]Until then.[/spoiler]
