Hey, you tried the scripting! From my reader's perpective, it looks 100x better. Everything's cleaner, more organized, the dialouge flows more smoothly, the action don't disrupt the conversation, and its much easier to comprehend. Did you run into any bumps writing it?
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Oh, hell yeah. I rewrote this part like 35 times because I wasn't satisfied with the story itself.
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The struggles of a writer lol. At least the final product turned out pretty good imo