Well done! You did great There’s only a couple little grammar mistakes. I noticed a couple other issues: [quote] "TEVIS!" I screamed, racing to his side. A single hole burned in his armor. The final blow.[/quote]Right here the Guardian suddenly has already seen Tevis. You should add a sentence before this that says the Guardian spots Tevis’ body. [quote] "I-Yes ghost," the Guardian whisperd, he looked at the limp body before him and saw the lights power fading. The hunter leaned over and grasped the last of Tevis's light, the anger the Guardian felt pulsing through him like ice in his veins. With one last grimace at the dead scout the hunter focused his new found powers drawing the shadow shot. He looked around, the dark glow of red eyes surrounding him and he drew upon the light again. A sick grin playing across his metal face...[/quote] The story starts in first person (I and me), but this last chunk is all in third person (he). I think the sentence where the Ghost spoke is probably what threw you off, because it’s right between the perspective change. You need to pick which perspective you want to use and fix the rest. I think first person (I and me) is best, because it makes it far easier to distinguish between the Guardian, his Ghost, and Tevis.