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Back as myself, I painfully felt the machine release its grip from around my waist, its circular mouth inflamed as its head ruptured into several molten shards. We collapsed on the snow-touched ground together, its body just as shattered as mine.
Aydin rushed to my side like he always did, but I hardly noticed him. Clarity of thought was gone, for my throat was clogged with a dense mass of copper tasting matter. The sickness was carefully choking me away from the realm of consciousness. I tried in vain to vomit it out, but it was too late, my eyes already dark.
I did not perish there, obviously, but dire consequences did still linger. From that point of my life onwards, the verdict of fate was simple.
I would never be alone again.
[i][Search the caverns of Io, near the Oasis where shadows lurk.][/i]
[b]Next Fragment:[/b] [i]Soon.[/i]
[b]Book:[/b] https://www.bungie.net/en/Forums/Post/251789024?sort=0&page=0
[u][b]Giveaway Info:[/b][/u]
[spoiler][i] I sincerely want to thank you for taking the time to read this. As always I want to improve my skills as a writer going forward, and any feedback you have, be it positive or negative, would be greatly appreciated.
I wish to give something back to my readers, so I will be doing a giveaway of the GuardianCon exclusive “The Moon Stirs” emblem code. To enter, simply leave a reply to this post with your thoughts on my story so far. You could focus on an individual entry of Biocatarus-2’s tale, or the narrative in its current entirety. There is no requirement on length, nor level of detail. Anything and everything helps.
The winner will be randomly selected on July 30th, exactly one week from this post's release.
[b]EDIT:[/b] Congratulations KaptKook, you are the winner! A PM has been sent so you can claim your prize!
As always, I thank you for your time.[/i][/spoiler]
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I'm actually loving what I just read! Genuinely looking forward to the next part so make it good. Keep doing what you're doing too. Is there any way I can turn on post notifications on your profile?
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Bunp!
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Really good writing, was worth the read. Looking forward to the next fragment :)
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That was an awesome read!!! Definetly liked and bookmarked to go back and read the prior entries when I have time. Keep it Up!!
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You’ve done a great job! Keep up the good work!
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I really like your writing. Nice job.
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Hey that's pretty good
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Edited by Мегадуэ: 7/23/2019 10:44:18 PMParticipate.Maybe im lucky.
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<I still haven't seen what the damn thing looks like in-game.>
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Edited by BioCats: 7/23/2019 9:47:00 PMThe fact that it won’t be available to wear until Shadowkeep was such a disappointment to learn about. [i]Ah well, just another thing to look forward to in the coming months I suppose.[/i]
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<That sucks. It'd be nice to at least get a preview. In D1 you could understand an emblem fully based on its icon. In D2, the background can look very different. The emblem quality is based off it's background AND icon. If an icon is bad, perhaps the background can make up for it. I don't really like the icon for the Quarantine Zone emblem but the color and background make up for it immensely. So far I don't really like the icon of this one.>
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I love the fact that you added mars. Also, I like the van bit. Definitely looking foward to the next one;)
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The story is excellent. What's the emblem like?