[quote]The rain flooded the mountains like the very gates of Heaven had opened. It covered the rocks, [b]soaking them beyond imagination[/b]. It drenched poor Jade and Mirage, [b]making them miserable. But it had no effect on Ronin’s determination to climb the peak[/b].[/quote] [b] It’s your job as a writer to make the reader imagine it. Saying it’s beyond imagination is saying that the reader shouldn’t even bother trying to picture it. That’s the opposite of what you want. [b] Again, the imagery could be stronger in this part as well. Character traits and moods like that are infinitely more effective if they’re implied, not directly, dryly stated. If you can build an interesting narrative you shouldn’t have to rely on getting support from sign-up posts.