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4/8/2018 9:40:06 PM
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Intriguing.
I really want to see what happens next, man. But as far as criticism is concerned, there are very few complaints. Go back and reread your story. Some places need commas and certain areas require a word to be added in.
I also really like the name you picked for the story; minuscule details also make a good story too in my opinion. And take all the time you need for the next part, man. This reminds me of a scary story but I can't remember the name of it.
8.5/10 - Intriguing; just a few grammar mistakes.
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Edited by abearjo: 4/9/2018 3:52:06 AMThanks! I did feel like I was missing a few things in there. I’ll definitely have to go back and fix them later. I got inspiration from the Silent Hill franchise and I’ve also always been really into guts and gore. But yeah, I’ll need to get the next part finished just cause I have so many ideas for this.
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Love Silent Hill. Keep it up.
