It's pretty good. I would just work on the tone and a bit more of the growl/groaning sound? I thinks that's what you call it. But other wise it's good. Better than what I could ever do.
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Yeah I tried doing more of that by duplicating the lines and shifting one over slightly. I think what I need to do is deepen the second voice and make it more gruff. I'll need to experiment a bit more.