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Edited by Bowaline:
8/26/2015 7:29:31 AM
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Just a note, it says he tucks and rolls toward the door then in the start of the very next paragraph says he's sliding? Just a bit weird as you went into so much detail about his ribs and what not. Otherwise it was a great read! Keep it up
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The roll was a separate action. As for the broken rib, I'm trying to make the character more human, showing some weakness, and when writing injuries, you have to bring them up frequently so people don't forget about it. That being said, both of these things could have been done better. Thanks for the feedback :)
