[quote]We cautiously but swiftly made our way...[/quote] Should be written as: [i]We cautiously, but swiftly, made our way...[/i] Because you can write that sentence without that phrase, therefore, it is considered non-essential information and should be enclosed by commas. A couple of typos scattered throughout, I know I was pushing you to get this done and I apologize for that. But just be careful when proofreading. When I finish a chapter, I will proofread it the next day because I was just looking at the same text for how long. So giving your eyes a break from it and proofreading later will allow you to pick up a lot more mistakes than you normally would. Anyway, apart from that, you've written a nice little saga here. Only a few more parts to go!