I liked the story, but there is an issue that in Destiny, no one is supposed to know very much about the old world, especially anything before the Golden Age of Humanity, when they ruled the entire Solar System. I liked the theme, but it doesn't seem fitting knowing this.
I'm not saying it's an issue necessarily for judging, but I meant it makes the story seem unfitting for this theme and setting. It seems like at this point in time, most literature and basically anything having to do with the "Old World" was lost and destroyed, so it is unlikely that religious faith was not crushed. More than likely, if a Bible had survived and been found in Destiny, it would just be literature, and the history behind it would be lost.