[quote][i]Adjusts collar and tie.[/i]
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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^Wyoming
[spoiler]Actually this one wasn't terrible. Good luck.[/spoiler]
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[quote]Well the evidence of improvement is there. That scene near the start with Loot, you have it in parenthesis. Take out the parenthesis and you basically described a character's actions and environment with good detail and without script.[/quote] ^Wyoming