原先发布于:Destiny Fiction Producers
Your use of multiple perspectives is really doing well. I like getting a look through all your different characters' eyes. Cereghetti is awesome, and I look forward to seeing what you do with William.
Bump!
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Yes, felt very smooth. Only thing I would suggest is to include more people in the future. If you're trying to take out a force quickly, then more people can make it happen sooner and give them a slimmer chance of getting caught.