Nicely done! I've been experimenting with a similar concept for a character of mine and I think the Hive lore is just amazing material to work with. Very cool to see others working with similar subjects.
As far as advice... Same thing KSeth mentioned. Add extra spacing between paragraphs for easier reading.
Keep it up man!
English
-
Edited by Speaker: 12/21/2018 5:55:57 PMthanks. I really just have to take the time to put those paragraphs in. [spoiler]You will drown in the Deep abomination![/spoiler]