As I said to Luke, there were more descriptions of things but they took up a lot of space and weren't really important. Also, Jeff is another users character so I'm not sure what kind of imp he is, but for the most part imps are short and have wings, so that's what I went with! Others can fill in with their imagination!

Fair enough! I know I kinda did the inverse with my pilot writing thingymabob, where I decided not to describe some things because I knew they’d push me over the character limit! Always better to be under descriptive than over descriptive, I say (well, to a point..). On a completely unrelated note, you describing the ichor as black threw me off for a second, because I always associate the word ichor with gold.

Yeah, I used black ichor for The End stories. I originally planned to be more descriptive with that aswell. Pools of black so dark it's like staring into an empty void. Also, it actually opens into an empty void! This story was originally going to take place in a necropolis and had like 3 paragraphs describing the scene, then another few to describe the mausoleum where the forging would take place with a sarcophagus of embers. Vampire lady was a priestess with a name, but character wise, she had no reason to share it so...I didn't. And it's not like it would matter because she is super dead now! I also had a long bit describing Melinoe's armor, but worn legionary armor gets the point across well enough. I spent like 2 hours looking up if greek/roman warriors actually wore sandals into combat or if that was just popular fiction... google is a pain and now I have a bunch of "Gladiator Sandal" ads on every website. Bleh. Overall though, I wanted to keep it shorter while practicing that "Less is More" thing. I'd say I still failed but eh. As long as people enjoy it!

[quote]Yeah, I used black ichor for The End stories. I originally planned to be more descriptive with that aswell. Pools of black so dark it's like staring into an empty void. Also, it actually opens into an empty void![/quotes] That’s super cool! I love when things that shouldn’t be openings are! I have this character named Iris, and one super neat thing she can do is shapeshift into a giant mouth, and then shapeshift the world around her to make a tunnel for that mouth to lead, even if what it was before was, like, solid rock or something. [quote]This story was originally going to take place in a necropolis and had like 3 paragraphs describing the scene, then another few to describe the mausoleum where the forging would take place with a sarcophagus of embers. Vampire lady was a priestess with a name, but character wise, she had no reason to share it so...I didn't. And it's not like it would matter because she is super dead now![/quote] I think both ways worked. 3 paragraphs is a bit much, unless the place gets revisited, but both locations work just fine. The name thing is always something I have an issue with. I want my characters to name themselves so it’s easier to write, but sometimes it winds up being really forced. [quote]I also had a long bit describing Melinoe's armor, but worn legionary armor gets the point across well enough. I spent like 2 hours looking up if greek/roman warriors actually wore sandals into combat or if that was just popular fiction... google is a pain and now I have a bunch of "Gladiator Sandal" ads on every website. Bleh.[/quote] Haha, I know how that is! I needed to look up a few travel costs and such for a story, and for the next few weeks I was getting hotel ads, and a bunch of things like “top 5 places to visit in Hawaii”. [quote]Overall though, I wanted to keep it shorter while practicing that "Less is More" thing. I'd say I still failed but eh. As long as people enjoy it![/quote] I thought it wae a nice balance of description vs. not for the most part. As mentioned before, some brief descriptions of the mythical creatures might’ve been nice, but otherwise nothing stood out as under or over described. The only thing I could see that might be over described is the sword, but since it’s presumably super important, describing it in detail is probably a good thing.

Yeah, I'm not too pleased with the sword description. I might come back to that later and fix it up a bit because Nemesis will be an important character moving forward.