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Edited by Gingiebread: 5/18/2022 6:50:51 PM
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Ah, your powers grow stronger, apprentice. [spoiler]Your poses and proportions really are getting better. She totally looks like a young girl, and your style fits. Her attire and the couple facts you shared about her give me thriller movie vibes.[/spoiler]
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  • I’m not sure “stronger” is the word I’d use. I think my spooky zombie picture was still my best one. :p [spoiler]This story she’s from has been really hard to write, and she’s part of the reason why, because she’s so completely op. So my friend & I were talking about possible solutions, and one idea I really loved was a sudden tonal shift once Iris’ powers are revealed, going from this actiony super hero conspiracy thing, to this pseudo-horror story, with Iris watching their every step, warning them not to step out of line. Aah, I love it![/spoiler]

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  • Oh, I think that zombie one is your best too, but I am seeing improvement in how you draw people. Sumpig seems to have pointed out some helpful things, but I also believe that you’re refining your style, which is cool to see :p [spoiler]Hm, [i]sehr interessant.[/i] You have so many writing projects happening, I’m amazed by how you can keep up with them all. ;-; I just recovered from a trying-to-come-up-with-ideas drought for the one story I’m working on lolol[/spoiler]

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  • Mmaybe one day I’ll finally decide how I want feet to look. :p On the topic of Sumpig’s suggestions, would it be okay if I asked for a second opinion on the “Shadow shape” bit? My intention was to make it aimless, and messy, so that it looked almost like a little girl drawing her nightmares, but one of Sumpig’s big sugestions was refining the shape because it was detracting from the picture as a whole. [spoiler]It is both a blessing and a curse. A blessing ‘cause all my stories are fun, but a curse because oftentimes I’ll write the first chapteror two then hop to a new project. :p[/spoiler]

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  • Edited by Gingiebread: 5/20/2022 4:55:28 AM
    It’s always okay :P I can see where he’s coming from. I think it’s pretty good the way it is, but refining the shadow shape wouldn’t hurt. Looking at it more deeply, it seems to be left wanting. A part of that could be simply detailing. I know that cartoonish styles tend to be less detailed, but there are still things you can do to add to the quality and make it overall more appealing to look at. I can see the pencil strokes. It’s hard not to show the strokes with regular pencils, but blending them up a bit or even drawing in a circular motion might add to the quality. Also, if you’re interested in a more smoky look rather than something solid, blend/draw past your guide lines. You can really get “aimless” with that because you aren’t boxing yourself in :P While blending, you might even be able to pull the led out to make tendril-y shapes. Maybe take a look at the enemies from the game Prey. They are probably more… [i]solid[/i] than what you want, but artists did a good job of making those creatures appear unstable and threatening, often with black, shadowy tendrils across their bodies and replacing their limbs. That might help you find some further examples/references for shapes. Edit: Another thing to consider would be making the shadow shape appear more consuming. In the drawing, it looks separate from Iris. Without your explanation, she’s just touching a dark mass with eyes. When I was a kid, it was harder to rationalize through dreams. I can willfully break myself out of a bad dream now, but back then it felt like there wasn’t an escape. If you feel like trying it, make her nightmares surround her. Loom over her. Follow her. Be a part of her. Seeing her standing calmly and reaching into it could make it appear all the more eerie. If that makes any sense :L

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  • It’s kind of hard to describe it exactly, but it is supposed to look solid. Like, early on she morphs into a humanoid shape, and they think it’s just a guy in black clothes. At the same time, though, she tries to lean into this idea of a “living shadow”, so maybe that would make it look flat? I’m not sure. :p I don’t know why I never thought about looking to the Typhon for inspiration, though, they do indeed look like spooky shadows. Probably ‘cause they don’t have lots of spooky eyes. I like the edit suggestion. I’ve written a few pieces with Iris where the shadow is a lot more like that, like it’s almost a separate being taking over; the original intro for the story had the shadow be directly antagonistic to her, seemingly murdering her (it didn’t actually kill her, though, but the audience would’ve thought it did). Even though she’s technically in complete control of it (‘cause, y’know, it [i]is[/i] her), she often feels like her powers dictate her entire life, so making the shadow all consuming & whatnot could be a good metaphor. And stuff. The feel I was going for was, like, y’know when somebody becomes a monster, and they look in their reflection, and then one side of the mirror is the monster half and one side is the human? I was kinda aiming for that, but without a mirror.

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