Beautiful
I just so happen to be a poet myself
Only part of it change was the
[quote]Just pull it’s white trigger to activate,
It goes off with a satisfactory “bang!”[/quote]
Part
The flow of “activate” and “it” doesn’t sound entirely right but can be easily fixed.
Perhaps with something like
Just pull it’s white trigger,
and off it goes with a satisfactory “bang!”
Really like it tho
Very catchy
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English
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Wow that sounds way better!! Thanks!