Very good! I love reading this series! There is one comment I’d like to make about one of your paragraphs though. During the flashback to the red legion attack, in the paragraph after the explosion you say “laira could hear nothing” and then you continue on with her gradually hearing a ringing sound, when you could’ve said something along on the lines of “Laira could hear nothing but the steadily increasing ringing in her ears” which would’ve allowed to sentences to have a continuous flow, then in the describing of the screams coming from the building it would’ve been better if you had mentioned the building in the paragraph before, “laira took cover in the rubble beside the crumbling building” because when you introduce the screaming in the next like I had no idea there was even a building nearby. But besides those it was a very good read! Nice work!