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originally posted in:The Black Garden
originally posted in: Prosper- Chapter 1: The Lies We Tell
6/24/2013 2:44:05 PM
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I loved it! Here's some constructive feedback. 1 more description 2 more careful introduction to the characters so the reader feels familiar with them 3 more explanation on the scene I have to admit you did the above pretty well but needed a little more. I liked the idea and where the story was heading to though.
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