originally posted in:Writers Corner
Aside from a slight quibble over your use of the word "laconic", which I don't think can be applied to air raid sirens as they tend to be anything but brief, that's probably the best poem I've seen posted on here.
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That's fair, I meant laconic, as in the message conveyed is concise. And also because I like to muck around with seeming contrasts, like 'drawling' and 'laconic', in this case. Thanking you for your thoughts.
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I thought that (i.e. the contrast) may be the case but it still doesn't sit right. Like I say though, it is only a very minor quibble over what is a very good piece.