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10/12/2020 2:15:29 AM
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Some words advise. You need to add more details, I can barely tell what's happening. Add descriptions of every scene, from multiple characters points of view if you want. It goes by too fast, you need to pace it out a little more and more content. Add more intensity, which can be achieved by adding more details.
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