Avoid using colloquialisms in your writing, I'm pretty sure I've never heard a guardian in universe use the term "dude" or describe their actions as "awesome". Also I'm not entirely sure about the guardians sudden blood rage or her ability to prevent guardians from respawning, especially in the crucible.
Also you may want to work on your dialogue, it seems a touch wooden, like I'm reading a script. And given the amount of guardians there are on a team you could have gotten a bit more intimate with your descriptions. If you're going to describe a grisly scene of murder then be prepared to go all the way. I don't feel shock or horror, and your duty as a writer is to make me feel that.
Also is Cyclops an exo, I find it hard to believed that he's a human. Also I'm fairly certain that ghost pulling up stats us a game exclusive thing, since it would be weird to have a tool like that in universe.
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Thank you for the criticism. When I go back to edit all the chapters, I'll do all that. Also, Cyclops is an exo.