[quote]Most likely. I’ll transmat us to the ship now.”[/quote]
Definitely work on dialogue. (I realize this is only second chapter) But you could make it seem a bit more interesting, and make it transition better. The minor things really make a difference.
"Most likely. So, yeah, I'll take us up to the ship now..."
English
-
Yeah I know. I might revise it later. I'm working on Chapters 7-12 currently so yeah.