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Edited by Onyx076: 3/12/2015 2:14:53 PM
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This gave me a good chuckle. There are some grammar issues scattered throughout, also, try double spacing when you have people talking. It's easier for the reader to follow, I would also [i]italicize[/i] his thoughts. One more thing, try breaking up that long wall of text. With every 3-5 sentences, start a new paragraph. It will help it look more "clean" and the reader shouldn't get lost as easily. Like I said, I enjoyed it and it defiantly made me smirk. Let me know when chapter 2 is out! Hope this helps!
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