I should clarify. The only real story takes place in a single morning. The speaker wakes up, routinely places a note in his daughter's backpack, and steps put the door. He is then snatched up by the "goons" that were mentioned. That's the basic gist. Everything else is back story, which is probably how the error occurred. I started out writing this with the intention of the speaker actually dying, but setting up his death for his family's benefit. 2,000 characters later, I realized that I was writing in the past tense, and that there were some obvious logical flaws with a dead man writing a story. The ideal thing to do would be to revert to present tense, and let the narrative itself be the note that's dropped somewhere randomly (probably not in the backpack; too cheesy). I might do that, or I might completely start over and work the basic plot scheme of this into something a bit more lengthy. I apologize for any confusion. This sort of thing happens with no proof reading. I know exactly what I'm saying and how it fits, but half the battle is getting the reader to see what I see. I'm on my blackberry now; so, I'll edit it when I get home for clarification. Thanks a lot guys. [Edited on 10.07.2009 11:32 AM PDT]