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So you want another chapter do you
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Well I just want to know how this makes sense according to the present timeline and fiction of Destiny. For instance, your character was apparently raised in the wild with a small group of human survivors, but how were they conceived? In the hundreds of years (and therefore at least 5 or 6 generations of human children) since the Collapse, how would a small tight knit group really survive without the capability of reproducing without incest? If your character lived his whole life in the wild (at least until adulthood, as he was grown enough to wear the Guardian's armour), how did he never encounter a Fallen? And heck how was it unsurprising for another living creature to be a non-human? He couldn't have known more than a few humans in his entire life. Everything else he'd have ever come across would be either animal, or alien. And Earth was under effectively constant siege for a very long time. And finally, how did your character manage to integrate into the city's society despite never being there or around large numbers of humans before? And how would he successfully imposter a Guardian he never met, knows nothing about, and therefore can't possibly know who's familiy or friends to this character, how to act around them, what faction he belongs to, how to act in that faction, or even how to act around people in general? It wouldn't be long before he was found out, and 2 and 2 put together for them to figure out he killed the Guardian. And... Where did the idea of the Guardians setting captive Aliens out to kill bandits come from?... It kind of doesn't make sense. The only non-humans that are allies with humanity are the Awoken and the Exo.
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Check part two already posted