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8/14/2014 7:28:28 AM
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Nicely done, you write really well and you brought the characters to life brilliantly. The different Ghost personalities was a really neat touch. You asked for criticism, so I'll offer one small piece: too many sentences started with the word "the" which is a mistake easily made .. and for someone of your vocabulary, easily corrected! Keep at it.
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