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Edited by Sesto: 12/4/2013 5:14:00 AM
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Screaming (Writing question, please help)

Should I have a scream in dialogue? I kinda feel like it feels cheesy or something... Like the beginning of the chapter starts with the MC waking up from a intense nightmare (which was the previous chapter), and I want him to wake up screaming. How should I do this? Start directly with the scream: "AHHH!" (see, that sounds retarded..) or what? I feel putting something like "He awoke with a scream." or something doesn't really express the emotion he is feeling well, but I don't know how to put the scream in dialogue without it looking retarded. MC stands for main character, by the way.
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  • MC = master chief writing some ghey fanfic huh op? fgt.
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  • Make him scream out a word, not a sound.
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  • Edited by HargbeastALT: 12/4/2013 5:30:14 AM
    "AAAAAAA I JUST FELL OFF A BUILDING, SPECIFICALLY A ROOFTOP WHICH I WAS PUSHED OR THROWN FROM"
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    • He was ripped from his dreams, in a shriek of horror.
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      • I hate dialogue.
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        • Edited by OPs mom: 12/4/2013 5:15:01 AM
          The best way to write it is "He woke up screaming because of a really scary nightmare he just had." I'm a doctor.
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          • Are you writing a Halo fanfic?
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