[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] ajw34307 [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Water Beetle [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Secret008 That was rather painful to read.It was littered with grammar mistakes.Flood is capitalized.Why exactly would the Humans need the Elites help to create another Spartan?Not enough description language.What kind of Flood was it?What armor was Mike and "Icka" wearing?What color?What were their features?His hair color?Age?Race? The sentence structure was terrible.You forgot a few full stops.Over all I would rate it a 3/10.[/quote] I agree it needs improvement, but I thinks you are being too harsh. OP could be 8 years old for all we know and aspiring to be a writer.[/quote] So what? We should praise this... [i]thing[/i] just because we don't want to hurt his feelings?[/quote] To be fair, if I'd been torn apart when I'd first started writing (four years ago!) I'd have probably been crushed and would have quit, so maybe we should give the guy a-- [quote]Hearing or seeing nothing Mike commando rolled behind another large rock.[/quote] ... never mind. But seriously, I'm just kidding. Keep at it, you'll get better. [Edited on 10.01.2012 4:50 PM PDT]