Ha, Wow... There be some fine flaming about! To Omega: I have written a Fan fiction myself (the first of my stories which I have let a group of people read), so I completely understand how hard it is to post it. Seriously. As far as the technical structuring goes, DangerWasp was right... It is really difficult to create proper paragraphs here in the forums (especially when copy/pasting from word or openoffice), so I really wouldn't sweat that too much. As far as getting indignant over criticisms... I get that too! Really, it is difficult to hear negative (even if they are intended to be constructive) thoughts about your work. When writing Haunted, I got many positive comments, and was thrilled. However, when the first negative comment rolled in, I was quite dismayed... Trust me, no matter how great your story is, there will always be somebody who doesn't care for it (see: my relationship with Stephen King's works). Take my advice: Keep with it! I have only read a little bit of it, but it seems like a good enough story. I will keep reading it if you keep on posting it. If you do want any pointers, I have created a thread for writing tips over at Halo;s new site. IT's called a community writing clinic, and it is in the community creations forum. Give it a look if you can dig it out of the thousands of threads over there. Also, my story, [url=http://www.bungie.net/Forums/posts.aspx?postID=67221692&postRepeater1-p=1]Haunted[/url] is here on the site. Feel free to give it a look, just to see another style. Maybe it will help. Good luck!