[quote][b]Posted by:[/b] ajw34307 [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Omega 019 Oh did I make you mad? I'm sorry, now get lost and never reply here again if you know what's good for your psychological well-being.[/quote] My psychological well-being has been absent from the day I learned of such a thing called 'the internet'. And no, you have not made me mad, only further lowered my opinion on this community and the 'holier-than-thou' people take when they're wrong. [quote]As for my 'Stupid-mindset', I find it disgusting how you say that I can't accept 'criticism'. The only thing I accept is [b]Constructive[/b]-Criticism. The reason for this is because criticism is just meant to annoy somebody and put them down, regardless, you didn't point out any tips or pointers, you just grabbed my FF and threw it to the ground like a complete and utter jackass that deserves to be silenced, and I think you do.[/quote] Except I gave you [i]constructive[/i] criticism, to reflect your statement, I find it disgusting that you are incapable of seeing it as constructive. I pointed out the flaws in your story and even gave examples of how you could improve it, yet you [i]refused[/i] to accept it. Let's walk you through some examples, since I have to treat this conversation like I would to a 6 year old... Part 1: Giving you advice about structure based on this site's format. [quote]Whenever we post our stories here, we make it easy for people to read - that means using line-breaks and paragraphing to avoid huge walls of text so a reader can easily digest what you've written.[/quote] Part 2: Questioning choices of narrative direction because things either don't fit together or are non-sensical. [quote]Firstly, it's relatively easy to work out what happened to the outpost because you already established that it was glassed. This is set in 2553, after the war where pretty much every human knows what happens when the Covenant arrive at a human settlement and what happens when they leave. The other objective is pretty vague... Valuable information may have been captured? If it's a small UNSC outpost then there can't have been very much valuable information there, right? It's set immediately after the Human-Covenant war but it's now they're concerned about whether information has been lost? I don't think that the timeline and setting matches the objective your character is trying to chase.[/quote] Part 3: Giving you advice on how to make sense of your story, providing a possible example. [quote]It would make more sense if it were set during the Human-Covenant war and the objective was made clearer. Maybe the outpost has star charts which show the location of a number of different outposts and worlds which weren't destroyed as-per the Cole Protocol? It's simple, but it'd make more sense and provide a lot more exposition for the reader if you went that route.[/quote] Part 4: Concluding that I like the concept but your fic has a lot of problems. [quote]I know I've given it a lot of criticism, but I do like the concept you're trying to establish, I just think you've given yourself a hard time going about it in such a way.[/quote] But no, despite all that you cherry-pick a few lines based on my response to your response which just reeked of arrogant denial because you evidently [i]can't[/i] take constructive criticism. And here I'll even give you another example which you've gone ahead and given me: [quote]Mediocre-FF? Gee thanks, that's some great Criticism right there, you hypocritical piece of mediocre used toilet paper. I wish I was JUST like you.[/quote] There. Arrogantly showing that you refuse to actually read the substance of an argument and instead cherry-pick the bits you don't like. [quote]P.P.S. I didn't really get into the story yet due to issues known as Storytelling. It's kind of a specific Genre where stuff get's explained as you go forward into the story YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAN I THINK?[/quote] If storytelling is your issue and you haven't been able to get over it at the start of the story then [i]why[/i] are you already posting it? Surely it can't be to get any criticism because you just reject anything that isn't blindly complimenting your work. Let me give you another example of why you want more people like me reviewing your story: [quote][b]Posted by:[/b] Habah I think OP wins. Also, good story.[/quote] You honestly want some brain-dead fool who will blindly involve himself in a debate he's evidently incapable of understanding, then tell you it's a "good story" without telling you what was good and what can be improved? And it surely can't be any time-related issue which impeded him from doing so because he had the time to read 7 whole posts (2 of story, 1 of criticism, 4 of arguing). If you really just want praise from people who will lap up anything you come out with, regardless of whether it's any good or not, then I'm afraid you're lost.[/quote]-points at self- LOOK WHAT JESUS DID! LOOK WHAT JESUS DID! LOOK WHAT JESUS DID! Why are you implying random stuff I didn't show any signs of showing? "That doesn't make any sense." Don't care. Anyways, I've been editing and fixing up MY story regardless of you debilitating comments and inability to take a hint.